Any successful, sudden, military advance and breakthrough must be followed at some point by a pause: you can only outrun your lines of supply for so long. So, too with stories. I took an half-hour around noon to think about what I’ve written in Nichole’s second book while sitting on my back deck and taking the view in.
Something was off. In the timing. I could not put my finger on it, so, ignoring the nice day, I went back inside and put a pen and notepad next to my netbook and used ‘Find: “month”‘ to search through what I’ve written. Sure enough, there was a two month discrepancy. I’ve re-written that section and even went back to my ‘Friend & Ally’ manuscript and made two minor changes there, as well.
I also went on to write a page and a half of notes about Part 2/3 of the new book (the newer book, I guess I should say). It’s hanging together better: the ‘barbarians’ new leader, called Ruin, is much more politically savvy than the guy from ‘F&A.’ So much so that he will win, to his later surprise.
Nichole is smarter, faster, stronger than any human. But she’s also isolated, even with her human allies. The men about the Mayor and the tribesmen closest to Ruin function the same way as a General Staff does, and it is very, very difficult for an individual to beat a good staff.
The coming week, even with sick dog’s appt Tuesday afternoon, is a working vacation: my boss is off. I expect much productive time!
Short? Sure it is. Abrupt? I don’t think so. Lampshade hung? I thought I did, both in the main story and this coda.
Consider: the “short” story of ‘The Second Bridge’ came in at 11.4k words. This “little” bonus ending is 4900 words. Sometimes, no matter how interesting these people are, I need to walk away for other projects.
To wit: my copyeditor has returned the 2nd edition of ‘Echoes of Family Lost.’ This weekend shall be spent implementing those changes. I tell you: no matter how you might prize your storytelling, when an editor hands back a manuscript – that you thought was fine – essentially bleeding red ink… it’s an incredibly humbling experience.
Thanks, everyone, for reading about Henge and her families. I hope you love them all as much as I do. After this weekend’s editing, we’ll be off again!
Continue reading “The Second Bridge, Coda, pt5 (end)”
Europa’s appearance was originally in Part 4, but the break didn’t fit. This installment is a little shorter, but my action sequences always are. You’ll see more of that next week once ‘Cursed Hearts’ is commercially available.
Editing of Proof Copy this weekend. Shall I come back to Logres & Europa? Move onto something else? I get many ‘Likes,’ but comments & quesions are very welcome, too!
Continue reading “Pirate Twins, 5; End Act I”
We all hated word problems in math. To commemorate this, forty years on, I created a word problem for myself in English: Chris leaves home on day -1, arriving in San Diego on day 0; the story between Chris and Cat unfolds, coming to a head when little sister drops into their love nest on day 12.
From the other side, Maya leaves home on day 1, spends some time in a hospital, travels by freighter then airplane, arriving in San Diego on day 16.
16 – 12 = 4.
Well, crap. I knew there was going to be a discrepancy, but four days?! So, putting down the coffee and picking up the wine, I did this to the Chris/Cat side:
A week had passed since their dinner and the odd ceremony Cat and Anton had performed on him. Although he did not understand, it had been efficacious in at least one way: his need to feed on the life force of animals was significantly lessened. Beyond that, home life with Cat had settled into a simple routine where they helped one another as much as they could. Chris still occasionally wondered whether he was imposing, but never detected that feeling from his cousin. If anything, she grew closer to him, both emotionally and physically, although it seemed something held her back from taking the next step, even after her ‘incident’ in the shower. Ah, well, he thought.
That gives me CC at +3 over M. Sooo…
“She’s made remarkable progress in her recovery over the past three days, barring her memory, of course.” He took a drink of his coffee.
See what I did there? Now the stories synch, with all my main character getting together for the bloodletting on day 19. Back to coffee.