It’s always bothered me that that particular Commandment was mistranslated like that. Deliberately, I’d suppose. If it can confuse humans, who else might it confuse?
There’s going to be a third and final part to Ep5; later….
Tag: machine civilization
“Defiant” – Life in Wartime
Episode five seems to be consuming my mind. That’s fine.
Someone pointed out the spelling/grammatical errors. Yepper: by the basket-load. These are RAWS. I make a very basic spell and grammar check before posting, but no editing. I’m writing, quite possibly to save my life, in what time I have. After a long dry spell, I SEE things! I want so much to show all of you!
So, sorry about the errors. I’ll try to do better. Cheers!
A Quiet Morning
Both for me and Nichole. Twelve hours ago, I had nothing. Now, I’ve Eps 4 & 5. Four is below; don’t think I can transcribe five until tomorrow: off to Mass in a few, then making steaks for the family afterwards, then anime in the basement.
By the by, I know zero – ZERO – about fashion. If what I describe Nichole as wearing is wrong, please let me know.
“Defiant” Discoveries
On my drive home this evening – after a stop at the UPS Store (work related) – I suddenly knew something about Nichole I did not just seconds earlier. Even better, I “saw” the reveal (in the episode below the fold) as well as something about her physically; that I don’t think will come out for a bit yet, but I might be wrong.
It’s such a joy to be writing again. To be creating again.
“Defiant” update
Pretentious titles are pretentious. I’ve seen more of Nichole’s story. More than I’ve written here, in fact, but I need to go make dinner. I’d like to write ep3 tomorrow, then show y’all something else that I worked on a year ago. Up until three days ago, it had nothing to do with Machine Civilization; now, I know who one of the welders was at the demonstration reactor north of Pataskala in “Echoes of Family Lost.” That’s for later; back to Portland….
RE:Boot
Yes: I’ve been away. I’ll address that at some later post. I’m here to write, so write I shall, after a brief preamble.
As you might have guessed from the name of this blog, my stories are in and about what I call Machine Civilization. Some ideas that I didn’t think were originally, seemed to change over time so that they “fit in” somewhere. And I’ve come to see that the entirety of the MC world itself changes, as well. There are obviously parts of the future history that cannot change as they’re part of canon from my two novels, but I’ve noticed fluxuations in the concept.
I would say I’m coming to a point, but I’m not.
Down below, from some months back, I posted the scenes I wrote for the Voltage competition from a story I called “Combination Play.” I didn’t win the competition – which is fine – but what ticked me off is that no one did! A cynical person would say that Voltage faked the contest just to shake people down for free stories and character art. Nonetheless, I’m fond of the characters that I breathed life into, and have thought some more about the story. Voltage, of course, owns the names, so that will change, and to fit into MC, I will change the location. So now, I’m going to do something I’ve never done before: I’m going to start a story at the beginning. Further, whether you call these ‘chapters’ or ‘episodes,’ I’m going to try to publish 2-3 each week. They won’t be all from the same “novel,” but they will all take place in my world of Machine Civilization. “A Writer writes,” and I wasn’t; this will give me the freedom of movement to begin, again.
Enough with me. Take a look below the fold to meet Nichole. She’s very young in our home.
Shelves and Tables
This past weekend, I marathoned the series “Man in the High Castle.” It was everything I expected from a PKD-Ridley Scott combination. I was pleased to see Rufus Sewell again, even if he is playing a Nazi. One of my favorite movies is “Dark City,” and he did superlative work in that.
Anyway. At the end of Ep10, I sat and thought a bit and came to the conclusion that – at this point of my life – I simply do not have what it takes to write political-espionage. I am shelving “Crosses and Doublecrosses,” for now. So… what now? I stared at the empty formal dining table, wondering when my wife would come home from her radiation treatments and what the Hell I was to do with my life.
Dated it may be, but my all-time favorite anime is “Haibane Renmei.” A brief review can be found here. A huge, spoiler-laden takedown can be found here. It’s very difficult for me to say what it’s about without ruining it; I could do it with a single word. It’s an extremely complex moral and theological story; amazing that a non-Christian Japanese writer seems to have a better feel for my faith than many of my co-religionists.
Some years back, a chap took the character models from HR and made a 30s video, based on a trailer for “Constantine,” a good, but very erratic movie. You can see the video here. While there are icebergs of story just below the surface of HR proper, just to look at it, it appears to be cute-girls doing cute-things. Guristantine is not that at all. Just as with the two ideas that were the genesis of “The Fourth Law,” the series and the video curled up in my unconscious, and waited.
Going back to our collaboration of 3-AR Studios LLC for our visual novels, my friend and colleague, Will, and I, had long thought of a live-action Haibane Renmei. We talked scenes, locations, actors… but nothing came of it. A few days after deciding to abandon “C&DC,” it came to me (how? how does this stuff just come to me??) to make a live-action series, based on HR; not just an adaptation….
One set in hard-edged Abandoned Factory, not the safety of Old home. One with deeply flawed characters, desperate to understand themselves and where they are. One where violence and sex are – if not out in the open – not pretended to not exist. One where the abandonment of either wing of the human soul (faith and reason) leads quickly to madness. One where… okay; you get it: I saw quite a lot, quickly.
Below the fold is a pretty raw treatment of what you could call a trailer for a six-episode series of 30-minute shows. I’m bricked in to swim meets for my girls all this weekend, and will be writing as much as I see, which, so far, is quite a bit. If any of this tickles your forebrain, leave a comment. I’m planning on throwing a couple of grand of my money at this, at least for the trailer. We’ll see what happens beyond that.
Iter II
Just finished another lovely deep-fried turkey. Wife wanted that to eat before she left tomorrow afternoon for Houston and radiation at MD Anderson . I exist to serve…dinner.
As I’ve mentioned, my machines have made me older that there are no such things as coincidences. This was seconded by a part-time pharmacist I work with. She’s also an illustrator. Her and her husband’s website is here. I’ve looked at their works and proposed that I commission them for either a webcomic or graphic novel. They’re more – allow (mich-allow?) me to blunt here – much more ‘artsy-fartsy’ than Will is, so I had to see a story that is more in line with their style.
The opening scene is below the fold. Thoughts?
Write Right
Had a conversation with a day-job co-worker yesterday. She’d asked if I’d finished my fourth novel, Crosses & Doublecrosses, in time for NaNoWriMo. Nope, I replied: that whole “wife diagnosed with cancer” thing was a bit of a spanner in my plans.
However, after some reflexion, I wondered if I would have finished in time if that had not happened. Outside of a handful of Robert Ludlum books as a late teenager, I really have no experience with espionage and political fiction. There were many times I stared at the monitor, unable to see anything of a story to write down. Was I losing the ability to make up stories?
A week ago, completely out of left field, came this: a writing and drawing contest from a Japanese/American company called Voltage. It wasn’t the US$5000 prize that caught my eye – no, really – but the facts that, one, this is for a visual novel (something I do know something about), two, they give you the characters and scenes (all I need to do is create dialog; breath life into the characters, as it were), and three, it’s a cute little story.
Cute. I can do cute.
So, last Tuesday, while my wife was getting a port installed in her chest for her chemotherapy (which started in-patient on Thursday), in the two hours or so I was waiting, I hand-wrote about 2200 words for the three scenes. Just like that. So easy! Apparently I didn’t lose the ability to see stories.
I’ve since typed it up and done some basic editing. I was concerned that what I wrote for Scene 3 was not in-line for romance stories directed at women; I read part of the scene to my wife last night at the hospital. “You’re suspiciously good at writing make-out scenes,” she quipped with a slight glare in her eyes. Hey: I grew up a geek and later became an engineer; people like me never had many girlfriends, but that didn’t mean we didn’t think about it… A LOT.
And, me being me, all of what I do hangs together in one way or another. You might catch a glimpse of that in the teaser below the fold.
Iter
My girls had a swim meet in Mason, Ohio, this weekend, so it was something of a working vacation for me. Vacation in that it was the first time since January since I’d slept anywhere but in my own house. Working in that I tried to get some more story written down. And I do mean written: typing is a bit problematic when sitting on bleachers at a high-school pool. Perhaps I’ll make the NaNoWriMo cut off; perhaps not.
Up this AM at 0400 to get my wife to the airport. She’s off to Houston for tests and consults this week for her lymphoma. It will be a busy time for me, what with day job, girls’ club activities, and whatnot, until her return. Writing takes another hit….
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