Back in the river for more fish. Suza says something a bit startling to her dad, who runs it back past Alix. Later, at breakfast, Pai gets sneaky again about later that day. Then she shocks Mindy awake with her news of her unilateral action.
If I can just get everyone to this afternoon, the next segment, I can return to the plot of “religious war?” and start making trouble for everyone.
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Continue reading “New Pai, 4”Some more exposition, this time about Mars. We already knew Alix is a huge contrarian, but when told to have her clothes on, she takes them off? That’s contrarian.
The comment about “all this in three days and you seem fine with it” hearkens all the way back to Niven’s A World out of Time, where the protagonist takes most everything in stride, including being 300 years in the future and in someone else’s body. Yes, I recall fifty year-old things like that but still don’t know the names of my DayJob coworkers.
The last line should have everyone muttering, “Two chicks at once.” Have a good a weekend as you can; see everyone Monday.
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Continue reading “Pai-Graf, 12/x”Fork. Stuck. I wanted closure for both two important points: the first, of course, is that Allie – and maybe her alone but more likely with some Life Guard (in the military, not swimming, sense) with her, are the one’s to enter Wonderland. Do I skip over securing the shrine? You bet I do. ”Some things Man was not meant to know,” is a phrase which exists for a reason.
The second is something touched on by Aurie first which even young Allie picked up on. For someone such as Fussy, accustomed to autocratic power her whole adult life, NOT acting along those lines would be very odd for her. So, in the midst of hinting at more wonders beyond that wall Allie could not – then – pass, she puts her great-grandmother very firmly into her place.
The end. Thanks for reading and thanks for those with comments and suggestions. I hope to have this published in 6-8 weeks, following editing and copyediting and formatting. Deus vult.
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” Ep/2. END”From where I started in the summer, this story continues to surprise me. I’d planned an intergeneration novel about the colonization of Mars, followed by some catastrophe where one or some of the demi-humans went feral. Obviously, they had other ideas.
This segment was what I was shown Sunday morning, and it, too, came out of left field at me. I thought I would have some scientific convos with Kira and politics with Fussy. I never envisioned Allie leaving her home world, but here we are.
May have to do a little research for what comes next. Writing “hard” science fiction, I cannot ignore Allie’s bones and muscles being weaker from growing up in a shallower gravity well. Heck, I’m not even sure where she lands: a demi of the Hartmann family in a Jap spaceship bearing news of aliens under Rus territory. It’s a mess.
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” 5/8″This is the next shoe to drop: Anton, as a soldier and diplomat of a minor power, sees what will come next: the shrine, the device behind the waterfall. Unlike the one Aqua hid, this will be in Russian hands in less than a month, with the potential to destabilize everything generations of humans, demi-humans, and Machines have worked so hard for.
The latter half of this segment did not exist until Sunday morning: Mass, again. This story is about to go off in a direction I never anticipated.
I would also like to formally thank Kalogeros Stilitis of Gab for his help with the Greek. I taught myself some koine Greek when I was 25 years old, but that was a lifetime ago and I recall almost nothing.
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” 5/7″Breakfast, the most important meal of the day, and a great time to find out things which can not only shatter your world, but could shatter more than one.
Aqua hid away whatever it was that tossed Fussy and Ed three hundred years into the future. Now a team of Russians are about to start excavating their way to what seems to be another one. Reina is not one to take “no” for an answer, so this could have significant political repercussions. Already rapidly becoming famous for her accidental discovery, I have a suspicion that Allie is about to be up to her neck in international/interplanetary politics.
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” 5/6″Allie tells her story, most of it, to her parents. Their pride in her is obvious, as is her modesty; she is no Fussy or Aurie
Between the Lewis Carroll and Easter references, this is becoming an allegory. I need to review my notes for the rest of Part 5 this weekend. I’ve got a pretty good idea about the Epilogue, but need to get from here to there, first.
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” 5/5″It was pointed out to me I never mention holidays in my stories. As far as I can recall, even as Catholic as so many of these people are, I never even mention Christmas or Easter. The way this segment ends makes me think there should be some kind of “Thanksgiving” holiday for the Martians. But, what date? Colonization was not like the landing of the first ship from a distant star, it’s been going on for more than a generation now. Allie’s amazing discovery? Why give “thanks” for that, as it creates a million new problems and possibilities? And, of course, there are three very distinct cultures, led by two races, on Mars; do the Russians and Japanese have the equivalent to a “Thanksgiving Day” in their current cultures? Perhaps I should just stick to shoehorning the religious one’s in where I can.
Back home into the bosom of her family, Allie makes a surprise announcement – on someone else’s behalf – before learning from her diplomat father the leading edge of the ramifications of her accidental discovery.
Still and all, Allie’s parents have something to give thanks for; Happy Thanksgiving to my FUSA readers!
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” 5/4″I swear I did not think about Allie’s name vis a vis that other girl who fell down a hole until yesterday. At least this way I dodged a huge discussion of politics. Maybe that will be tossed into the lap of Anton, next.
The thought I had in the lead-in of the last segment was enough to have Allie voice it to Fussy; outside of war, no one should have to bury their children or grandchildren. Longevity is a curse.
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Continue reading ““The Fallen” 5/3″Another reflective segment. No politics as yet. Given that Fussy now knows literally everything Allie recalls from her little adventure, I’d imagine she thinking very hard about what comes next while talking to her husband and this little hero.
I only found out how sad Fussy was, the regrets, on my drive home from DayJob today. As we know from Regent, Aurie possesses a certain bloodlust. It was always just a job for Fussy. And from what they now know from her brother Gary, she realizes that she will outlive her second husband and at least three of her children: humans Callie, Robert, and Julian. Honestly, she might outlive some of her grandchildren. That has to hurt.
With no stemma attached, to be clear, Johnston, as Fussy’s second husband, is step-great-grandfather to Allie. Blood only matters when thinking about the Demi allele.
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